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the moon is vacant, 
the sky, black bellied and heaving.

i've got one hand tucked in a pocket,
the bare fingers of the other 
caressing a joint, 
lips pursed: philosophy loosens,
slips from them 

and expands across the yard. 

your hair hangs 
in curtains around our faces,
containing smoke that billows.

and your pulse 
echoes through my skull--
grey eyes have never been more alive.
 
Friend took me to a party in a backyard. Ended up pillowed on the legs of some guy with hair like water and steel eyes, smoking a joint. Watched the smoke billow and slip over the planes of his face as I talked philosophy with the stars.
(Disclaimer: It was a dream. I can't seem to rid myself of bird-men or illegal substances in the dark.)
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:iconadrolyn:
Adrolyn Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think your artist comment might actually be even cooler than the poem itself.  =)
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Echolalic-Ellie Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It was a pretty cool dream, haha.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think more space plays to the dream. Let me know what you think.

the moon is vacant,
the sky, 
black bellied and heaving.

i've got one hand tucked in a pocket,

the bare fingers of the other 
caressing a joint,
lips 
pursed: philosophy loosens,
slips from them

and expands 
across the yard. 

your hair hangs
in curtains around our faces,

containing smoke that billows.

and your pulse 

echoes through my skull--
grey eyes have never been more alive.
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:iconecholalic-ellie:
Echolalic-Ellie Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
All the yes. :heart:
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:iconchromeantennae:
chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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SleepingInTheShadows Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really really LOVE the imagery in this one. :heart:
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:iconecholalic-ellie:
Echolalic-Ellie Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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