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she could have been a violin;

born a week too late, she had
melancholy in her bones: doctor lizbet
took time out of her schedule to pluck her
newborn strings - calloused sanitation against
mottled pink-and-yellow flesh & thrashing limbs.

in three more years, she will have
nothing in her bones at all: doctor estair
diagnosed her with iatrophobia to fuel her
instinctive chords - ripple-free shells of liquid
lobotomy & a capsule to callous her pink-and-yellow
flesh against the thought of just getting over it all.

ten years after that, her mother will
find her face down and thrashing: her dust
bunny bones will flex as she retches up her memories
for display - lawyers will spend the next few years pawing
through them with clawed hands and heaving breathing until
one day, they find lizbet and estair huddled amid the rubble of her bones.
I would appreciate any thoughts or opinions you may have.

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Collaboration with the lovely *Rainyhawaii who found this scrap [link] and decided it was worth working on with me. :heart:
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The Problem With Elia. by *Echolalic-Ellie ( Suggested by BloodshotInk and Featured by GrimFace242 )
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MatieuCanadaWilliams 2 days ago  Hobbyist General Artist
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chancerox Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i love the idea of dust bunny bones :) 
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Echolalic-Ellie Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It conjures a pretty image, I think.
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chancerox Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it really does. gets you thinking about the fragility of oneself 
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Echolalic-Ellie Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:nod:
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bloodawni Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was beautiful, despite the topic. Fantastic writing indeed, and congratulations to both of you on a very well deserved DD.
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Echolalic-Ellie Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :bow:
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EmeraldEyes14 Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Okay so
I am confused
are you saying the doctors poisoned her???
" lawyers will spend the next few years pawing/ through [her memories] with clawed hands and heaving breathing until/ one day, they find lizbet and estair huddled amid the rubble of her bones."
So their hiding from the lawyers in the main evidence, the bones? Is that it? But why would they do that?
The idea of a violin also makes me think that she is being manipulated, "pluck her/ newborn strings" doesn't sound good.

Anyone agree with me or have their own interpretation?

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Echolalic-Ellie Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Your interpretation is very interesting, but not what I intended. Lizbet and Estair molested her.

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EmeraldEyes14 Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thanks for the clarifaction. Very complex poem for sure, as well as very vivid images and emotions. One of the best poems I've seen in quite a while. ^^
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